[原创] 《请跟我去趟2008年的北京 》

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; COLOR: red; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体;">请跟我去趟<span lang="EN-US">2008年的北京<p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 55.5pt; mso-char-indent-count: 3.95;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体;">诗 心<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp; 请跟我的心</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">去趟</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">2008</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">年的北京</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">地球村在那里有一个盛会</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">不用问</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">你我来自哪一个国度</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">心与心串起的五环下</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">我们都是一衣带水</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">吉祥的和平之光</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">在我们的天空上相映成辉</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">请跟我的爱</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">去趟</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">2008</font></span><span st

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感觉太散了

有点空洞，而且这样的写法太表面化了，最好是避开熟悉的套路，选择一个角度仔细提炼，这样会更好！

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">请跟我去趟</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">2008</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">年的北京</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">让我们赤诚的心</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">让我们真挚的爱</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">让我们火热的情</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">在那里与和平约会<br/><br/>喜欢这段</span></p>

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">心与心串起的五环下</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是一衣带水</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">爱与爱搭建的的赛场上</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                                <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是村南村北</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                                <p></p></span></p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">情与情燃起的圣火边</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是兄弟姐妹</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><br/>(形象生动！支持。。。）</span></p>

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">心与心串起的五环下</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是一衣带水</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">爱与爱搭建的的赛场上</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是村南村北</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">情与情燃起的圣火边</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">我们都是兄弟姐妹</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;">
                        <p>好词句不少!</p></span></p><p>好词句不少!</p>

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">美丽的和平之花</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">在我们的村庄里吐芳绽蕊<br/></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">吉祥的和平之光</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">在我们的天空上相映成辉</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><font face="Times New Roman"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">动人的和平之音</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">在我们的胸腔里激扬放飞</span></font><p></p><p></p><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p><font face="Times New Roman"><font face="宋体" size="3"></font><br/>&nbsp;</font><br/><font size="3">很美的词句<br/><br/><br/>支持诗心大作</font></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-9-24 19:13:09编辑过]

我跟你去。[em07]

有新意----[em23][em23]

只怕到时去不了：）

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<p>2008北京题材作品中的另类之作.说它另类,主要是指创意的独特性.</p>